Read three selections of student work from the PVRHS Gallery:http://galleryofwriting.org/galleries/223497 . Choose your favorite written work by either a Pascack Hills or Pascack Valley student, and comment on your favorite part about the piece [include the title and author].

What are your thoughts about the writer's tone/ voice? Is he/ she aware of an intended audience? If you could conference with the writer, what advice would you give to improve the selection?

I read up up and away by Alex Brinker. It is about him feeling like a lion in the zoo and the bats flying over him. My favorite part of the poem is the ending because i think it comes to end and it sounds good. The tone of this poem is sad because its about a lion being alone during the night. It says how he is watching the bats fly over him as he feels lonely. If i conferenced with this kid i tell him to make the middle of the poem make more sense. The middle he takes about being a poet when the beginning was about being a lion.